“No one ever lacks a good reason for Suicide” – Cesare Pavese (Itlaian poet/novelist)
My life's a mistake, I deeply regret,
Kindred thoughts again, flashing through my head
Mocked at, a joke or a bloke unwanted
Or am I just being taken for granted.
It’s my life, it ain’t no more fun,
My minds speculating, while my eyes lay on that gun.
"Pick me up" it says, as it rests on the shelf,
Should I succumb to it and just blast myself?
Or give into cries of the razor edged knife,
To hack and slay a wasted life.
I choose the latter, holding it close to my heart,
So close, it rips all my life apart.
Coalesced with blood, rolls down each tear,
Realizing what I’ve done in despair, I fear.
Regret or remorse, I now can’t live it’s too late,
Was it my life or my death, what was my mistake?
22 comments:
hey really really nice..
u have expressed it really beautifully..
and one thing that henna design was not mine.. it was from a book ..
i too draw.. and the first 3 designs in the henna label are mine... and inshallah i will post some more of my personal design soon..
every one here wants me to draw for their wifes.. i think looking at those designs every one wants to get married.. hahahaa
Why do you choose to write about suicide?
@ ishqia
thanks.. hehe.. well i dunno anything abt this henna thing ..so cant comment much on it
@ solitaire
I heard abt some similiar suciide case.. and it made me think depression and despair lead people to take such drastic steps.. it was on my mind so wrote abt it
hi.
it is so touchy.
That was very dark indeed but once in a while you need to unleash such thoughts!
Very well crafted :)
...drag ur mind out of the thought. Seems its too powerful to make u think of all ths...
powerfully written !
hmm.. musheer.. the poem is well composed.. but it also reflects your state of mind.. i do agree that its depression and despair as u have said which drives one to commit suicide.. its not just listening about similar stories.. here its actually reflecting your state of mind with the gory picture..
The pic u've put there gives a disturbing feeling to look at it.
May be this thought just came to ur mind and u just posted it... otherwise, it should not have anything to do with ur state of mind?
Write about something that gives u a positive n good feeling now.. :)
- Karma
@Sandhya -
yes it's supposed to be touchy :)
@Sameera -
Thanks a lot :)
@rashi -
Thanks for visiting my blog :) It was a flowing thought, has already flown outta my mind
@banu
Thank you for your comments. No it does not reflect my state of mind. it just reflects a general suicidal mind ..
@Karma
Hehe.. i knw karma.. the pic is too gory. Well it had to be, I was writing a suicidal poem. Yea ill probably write something positive next.
It's damn nice...and yeah like all the comments says.. it's touchy too...really enjoyed reading it! keep up the good work mush... :)
but mush the picture is seriously very disturbing!!!! i mean reminds me of Jigsaw in Saw1 :D
@Bidisha..
thanks.. a comment from a fan of my writing really means a lot. I guess u should restart ur writing too. Talkin of jigsaw .. i saw the saw series all over again recently ..
good poem.. that picture is ........awful.
come visit my blog..
No updates? :)
Hey Mush,
Just wanted to let you know that Psychobabble is up and running again. :)
awesome cooment...u really expressed those feeling really well!!
hats off to your pen
awesome!! tho i dnt like sad topics.. u've writtn it very nicely..
loved the last 2 lines.. dunno which was a mistake..
Well written. V. well written. like most of ur poems
BUT
why the negativity n sadness? i would love to read a happy poem written by u...shall wait :)
@ fictiongirl
Thanks - did vsist ur blog and left a
comment too
@Sameera - no time . will update soon
@solitaire - yep did visit psychobabble and i do read ur posts when i get free time. Its just that i have a tight schedule
@Zahra - thank you so much
@knatchbulley - thanks, feel good that though u don like sadness, u liked this. yep last 2 lines give the whole feeling
@Pavi.. :) thank you pavvvv .. hehe it was long i had not written anything this hard and intense.. yep will come up with somethin happy
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